A Promise (READ THIS...PLLLLEASE)

Sat, May 25, 2013 at 7:34 PM By: pandemonium23

This poem is very personal, and possibly one of my best...I just wrote it a couple of minutes ago, and when my mom read it, she actually cried! I ask you to read this with intensity, and you should listen to the song Still by Hurt, that is what I listened to while writing this. Please read it with every ounce of emotion. Thanks...

A Promise

I am not very good at fixing you,
I have used glue, but you just
stick to me and pull and pull

I have used tape,
but the pieces don't
seem to go on straight

I have stitched you up
but the string just breaks

My fingertips are torn and bloody,
My soul is worn thin, I don't
think I can fix you, are you
even worth it?

I am sorry I asked that,
but I have realized now
that I am broken.

It hurts, I can't even cry,
we are two destroyed dolls
now, just thrown to the side.

I can't move, but I am still alive,
You are telling me we should just
give up and die, that we would be
happy in the afterlife.

Then I realized why I could
never fix you, because you
never really wanted to be fixed at all.

From the very beginning, you
wanted me to fall, but this
broken doll will not die, the
afterlife will have to wait another time

No matter how long it takes
the glue to dry, no matter how many times
I must stitch myself tight, I will rise up
and be a shining light.

Beautiful with my scars and damaged heart,
Never again will I fall, I promise that
to you all...

I promise that to you all.

  1. Silent Metal avatar

    On Mon, May 27, 2013 at 12:59 AM, Silent Metal said:

    very nice and emotional, i like the final part, it's much more optomistic, the middle was really moving and sorrowful, great poem

  2. jayjay avatar

    On Sun, May 26, 2013 at 2:58 PM, jayjay said:

    That was touching, I can see why your mum cried! A SHINNING LIGHT YOU ARE.=)

  3. Figure09 avatar

    On Sun, May 26, 2013 at 12:34 PM, Figure09 said:

    i like that!

  4. mlukec avatar

    On Sun, May 26, 2013 at 11:34 AM, mlukec said:

    This song make me think of situations like this. If you like dnb.

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kfNLk3KTsX4

  5. mlukec avatar

    On Sun, May 26, 2013 at 10:12 AM, mlukec said:

    Yes, one of your best!!!

    Glue, tape, stiches, our hearts. We can give everything to try and help someone else, but, in the end, it is their decision. That song is incredible. I had not heard them before.

    I would be water or air
    Anything to get you there
    I would be silent or scream
    Anything to help you dream
    But you didn't want to breathe
    And you didn't want to drink
    You didn't want to listen
    So now we barely speak

    Those last two stanzas are awesome. You made them so hopeful, so determined. Yay!!

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